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One thing that the internet has changed for the music industry is that unknown singer can promote themselves for free.

Famous singers e.g. Justin Bieber became famous because of the song that he posted was a cover which got over a billion views .Most bands performed and made most there music in their bedroom this was because it reaches globally without having to spend money .This was called bedroom band where most things are filmed in there house .The advantage of this was that they could self promote their own music and they had 24 hour access to their rooms.

Since new technology has come in newspaper articles are bought less because you can  now just go onto the internet and get it for free .This has given the audience more power because they can just catch up with anything online e.g. citizen journalism  can make everything by using phones and posting it online .The disadvantage is that less people buy newspapers which means the newspaper companies make less money and the writers make less money as well .The problem because of this was that 15 years ago people had to go to the country where everything was happening and take down points.

www-your tv paragraph has clear examples and is well focused + expressed clearly.

EBI-Your literacy (written english) holds back your argument .Don't rush +always proof read for sense + accuracy .lazy not to check and your news and music paragraphs are weaker/confused.

My essay count was:454

my best paragraph was the tv paragraph because i used media terminology.

my weakest paragraph was the music industry because i did not make much sense.